ANC Summerizer 21/1
Mary Lou is a 13 yr. old girl that has to make a journal on what she did over the summer. she also has family members that drive her crazy. she also have a cousin that doesn’t talk very much, coming from West Virginia. His name is Carl Ray. When Sally Finney herd about this she wasn’t happy.
When Mary Lou and Dennis were moving the bed down from the attic to bring to Carl Ray’s room, the bed slipped and one of the springs popped out and cut Dennis’s knee. There was a lot of blood. Mary Lou had to go over to the house that Dennis egged because no one else was home, to ask for help. She rushed over and took Dennis to the hospital. Mrs.Furtz wouldn’t let Mary Lou gowith to the emergency room.
Mary Lou was scared that her brother Dennis might die because of something she saw in a movie. She also thought if he died maybe she would get all his stuff. Afterward she felt very gulty.when Dennis got back he didn’t have to do anything and he got lots of ice creame and ginger alle.
Carl Ray got treated like a king. He got to sit in the special chair, got to sit in dad’s chair, and got to go into the bathroom first. The kids were furious.
December 2nd, 2006 at 10:15 am
Good job. You picked the important parts to write about and you have a beginning, middle and end. You have a few spelling mistakes and you need to re-read what you write before you post - some of your thoughts could be clearer. Also, be sure to explain who people are - saying that Sally Finney wasn’t happy about Carl Ray coming doesn’t let me know who Sally is.
December 4th, 2006 at 10:13 am
you need to check your spelling before you go off on somebody like that.!!!.
December 4th, 2006 at 10:13 am
I think that you did a very good job on this. You were very detailed. I think that you should explain the characters more.